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    Star Cool Poems Here!

    As I lay awake in the silences of night My heart starts to hurt and with ever beat comes one more tear from my eyes my throat starts to tighten it gets harder to breathe .

    I start to grasp for air as I shed another tear .

    every night I long to be in his arms again where it felt safe and right .

    Where his kisses gave me warmth and his smile light up my day .

    I long for the days we talked for hours .

    But as each day passes I begin to lose more of my heart and I become numb to any feeling .
    The pain has become my best friend and the thoughts have forever taken over my mind silencing me with the memories of the days when everything made sense .





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    Default re: Cool Poems Here!

    This is a really nice poem. It has a sad tone to it, but something touching too.



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    Default re: Cool Poems Here!

    Very moving... I don't want to say nice, because it was a sad poem but I am sure it came from your heart



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    Default re: Cool Poems Here!

    What a beautiful, deep, heart felt poem. Thank you for sharing this. Sending some happiness your way.



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    Default re: Cool Poems Here!

    what made you make this poem? its so sad but with a lot of other feelings melted into it.....



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    Default re: Cool Poems Here!

    It's sad & poignant. I like it, but I'm sorry for your pain. Thanks for sharing.

    Knightwing



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    Default re: Cool Poems Here!

    I cried a little and then cried some more



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    Default re: Cool Poems Here!

    very nice poem, lovely



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    Default re: Cool Poems Here!

    Lots of feeling. Keep up the work. My daughter has published poems and I encourage everyone interested to write what they feel.



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    Default re: Cool Poems Here!

    I like poems but im not that god at them unfortunatly. I made a haiku (a japanish poem). they are funny to make because of all the rulls.



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    Default re: Cool Poems Here!

    my advice [not that you asked for any ]

    so yeah, it was good but it needs polishing, the freeverse was really ... free. you can make the poem real dramatic with pauses and commas, not just a straight line, fragments per line are good since it's freeverse after all. if you do that, the reader's eyes are moving start to finish, start to finsih, in like seconds, so they don't expect what comes next--the pauses are important, it's like the difference between holding your breath and being breathless.

    so yeah, i'm not an expert but i'm hoping to be

    and that concludes my unsolicited advice. haha



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